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Academic writing practice for IELTS-Task 1-Test 3

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The graph shows the value in thousands of dollars of dollars of 3 companies selling farming equipment every 5 years from 1960 and their projected value from 2007 to 2012.

Greenacres Ltd was valued highest in both actual and estimated amount, beginning the period with 2 billion dollars and doubling by 2012. The firm's actual value increased steadily in the first 3 decades until reaching its peak of 4 million dollars, then declining by 1 billion dollars 5 years later. Their value was predicted to continue going down by another 1 billion dollars in 2000 when their top position was projected to be overtaken by Farm Implements for the very first time. After that, their estimated value was about to rise again before hitting their second peak by 2012, taking back their top position.

Farm Implement Ltd didnot trading until 1980 when their value was at 1 billion dollars. Since then, until 2012, their actual as well as estimated values both experienced a steady growth of 500,000 dollars for every 5 years, except from 1990 to 1995 where there was a larger increase of 1 billion dollars.

Carsons Ltd witnessed some fluctuations in both real and forecast values during the period of 42 years although the general trend was upward, climbing from 500,000 dollars to 1.5 billion dollars, showing a three-fold rise.


@Hiep: Help me to paraphrase the topic sentence please, I have no idea about how to do it this time.
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Okie ! Let leave it for the master ! hehe

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aqua wrote:

My answer:

The graph shows the value in thousands of dollars of dollars of 3 companies selling farming equipment every 5 years from 1960 and their projected value from 2007 to 2012.

Greenacres Ltd was valued highest in both actual and estimated amount, beginning the period with 2 billion dollars and doubling by 2012. The firm's actual value increased steadily in the first 3 decades until reaching its peak of 4 million dollars, then declining by 1 billion dollars 5 years later. Their value was predicted to continue going down by another 1 billion dollars in 2000 when their top position was projected to be overtaken by Farm Implements for the very first time. After that, their estimated value was about to rise again before hitting their second peak by 2012, taking back their top position.

Farm Implement Ltd didnot trading until 1980 when their value was at 1 billion dollars. Since then, until 2012, their actual as well as estimated values both experienced a steady growth of 500,000 dollars for every 5 years, except from 1990 to 1995 where there was a larger increase of 1 billion dollars.

Carsons Ltd witnessed some fluctuations in both real and forecast values during the period of 42 years although the general trend was upward, climbing from 500,000 dollars to 1.5 billion dollars, showing a three-fold rise.


@Hiep: Help me to paraphrase the topic sentence please, I have no idea about how to do it this time.
@All: Give me some feedback please. I am grateful to you!!!

Word count: 222

Hi Aqua!!!

Again, i hope this will help....

The graph shows the result of a comparative study made on the three companies engaged in selling farming equipments. It reflected the value in thousands of dollars.

As seen in the graph, the value of the two companies, Greenacres Ltd. and Carsons Ltd., were being compared beginning the year 1960 and every five years thereafter until 1980 when Farm Implements Ltd. joined in the business. Greenacres Ltd. started at a value of 2 billion dollars, rose up to 3 million in 1965 and continued to rise at a steady pace for 3 decades. It reached its peak in 1990 with a value of 4 million, however, it jumped down in the following 5 years when it showed a decline of 1 million and continued to fall and equal its beginning value in the year 2000. However, the company was not alarmed of its fall as it projected a steady rise starting the year 2007 until it will reach its peak again at 4 million by the year 2012.

On the other hand, Carsons Ltd. was seen to be in a constant pace since the beginning of their investment in 1960 at a value of 500 thousand dollars. It did not compete well with the leading company, Greenacres Ltd., as it experienced a varying value every five years of operation, but it did survive and has projected to slightly rise in 2007 with a short fall in 2010, yet, is expecting to triple its value at 1.5 million by the year 2012.

Farm Implement Ltd. joined in the business only in 1980 and was valued at 1 million. It showed an increase in value every five years thereafter, which has an alarming effect over the leading company, Greenacres Ltd., as it rose steadily at a good pace and surpassed the latter in the year 2000 with a value of 3 million, showing a difference of 1 million in value. It projected its existence to compete well with Greenacres for the next 5 years from 2007 and expect to reach its peak at 3.5 million by 2012.

As forecasted, Greenacres Ltd. still leads the business in selling farming equipment by year 2012. However, the year 2007 marked a challenge to the leading company as it struggled to level up with Farm Implement Ltd. when the latter surpassed the former in the year 2000. As illustrated in the graph, 2007 was a great come back of the leading company when it raised back its value at 3 million, a slight estimated low margin of about 100 thousand from Farm Implement Ltd. which showed ahead at 3.1 million that time.



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Nice jobs, everybody ! What a Face

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aqua

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bluebirdy wrote:Hi Aqua!!!

Again, i hope this will help....

Definitely it helps, Birdy. I don't know how to say thank you to you!!!. I really admire you because you can organize your writing in such a cohesive and detailed way. I hope that I can produce an essay like that in the future!!!

I have written down your writings on my notebook for my reference or I call it studying material. I hope you don't mind!!!

You are a great motivation for me to keep on writing each day!!!

A mountain of thank to you and God bless you Birdy!!!

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